Did you ever heard of the National Fun Day? No? Neither did I. But if there really is one, I must have been the one who create it. “National Fun Day”, I know it may sounds a little bit cliché but I think it’s what people really need.
National Fun Day, it’s obviously a day for fun. On that day, no sorrow or anger would be allowed, only fun. For instance, on that day, students don’t need to go to school and grow-ups don’t need to work; people can spend the whole day sleeping; everywhere will have parties all night long; no schools will be allowed to give transcripts to students, especially to those bad students; and no couples should break up on that day since it’s not a fun thing at all…
The reason that I think there should be a national fun day is because the world is too depressing. Every day people have to face different kinds of things, and they have to endure all the stress and even pain. That’s horrible. Most people spend their whole lives working and studying, and by the time they finally have time to think back of their lives, they found that their lives were so boring that didn’t even have any fun. That’s not how people should live their lives.
I think by having a national fun day can help people live a happy life and to leave a precious memory for them to think of later.
So people, let’s have some fun!
National Fun Day, it’s obviously a day for fun. On that day, no sorrow or anger would be allowed, only fun. For instance, on that day, students don’t need to go to school and grow-ups don’t need to work; people can spend the whole day sleeping; everywhere will have parties all night long; no schools will be allowed to give transcripts to students, especially to those bad students; and no couples should break up on that day since it’s not a fun thing at all…
The reason that I think there should be a national fun day is because the world is too depressing. Every day people have to face different kinds of things, and they have to endure all the stress and even pain. That’s horrible. Most people spend their whole lives working and studying, and by the time they finally have time to think back of their lives, they found that their lives were so boring that didn’t even have any fun. That’s not how people should live their lives.
I think by having a national fun day can help people live a happy life and to leave a precious memory for them to think of later.
So people, let’s have some fun!
Partner Comments:
The idea is great. People now need a day to relax and don't need to worry about anything. The body part is specific, that's good. Tell others clearly what they should do and what they shouldn't. I think there is only a small part you should improve that's the opening part. Many students will use "If I could create a national day......" This kind of opening will be a little bit boring. If you want to grab others attention, the opening part must be attractive. If you rewrite this part, your article will be more interesting.
Reflection:
When I started writing, I started with my topic “National Fun Day”. Then I write about what people can do on that day. In the ending part, I write about the reason why people would want a day like this. That’s how I started my draft.
In Lisa’s comment, she told me I should improve my opening part. So I decided to change it like she said. I think that really can help my article to be better.